Commentary

In my speech i used rhetorical devices to make the audience i chose to think about the subject at hand "Who should be held accountable for when a child fails his or hers GCSE's, the teacher, the parent or the student?" "First i will discuss the role of a teacher, is it just to teach, or is it to be held responsible for the achievements or failure's of all of their students?" I used this because the audience could be engaged through this technique as they hand to think about what i was asking them, and make their own judgement up which was useful as this is a very controversial issue and you need people to think about it to get to the point you need to be in where everyone can voice what they think but ultimately find a common ground and realise everyone is responsible to an extent. 

I also used inclusive pronouns "We need to realise" this gave a feeling of togetherness as it was meant to unite the audience to make them realise that we really all should have the same goal, even with our differences we should hope for the students success. This makes the register slightly intimate as it joins everyone together as one by saying words like 'we' and 'our' gives this effect.

Leading to synthetic personalisation "Leading me to you parents and carers, now i know you work hard and have to come home to the kids." "but as i'm sure you know the classes range between 25-30 students" This gives the parents a sense of belonging in the meeting as they are pointed out specifically, also giving a sense of importance along with this. But really we know that the reader of this speech doesn't really know who you is he/she is speaking in general as it is not a personal conversation, so really the importance and belonging is meaningless.

I also used comedy "I know what your thinking.. the teacher should do that, and don't get me wrong i understand" "choice wisely how to spend your extra time. Will you sit and watch replays of The only way is Essex, watch a football match or will you spend that last hour before your  tea on a Thursday night revising for that mock exam you have Monday." This gets the audience to feel comfortable in the atmosphere they are in, it leads to them being more open minded as they feel not so forced as the speech proceeds. Giving the reader of speech a bit of power without them realising it as the audience feel like they can relate to you leading you to discussing your ideas making them to possibly think it too.

In the speech i also mentioned some statistics "95% A-C grades and we believe if we all work hard to cooperate we can achieve this." This makes people engage as there is hard hitting evidence to back up the point made originally.

OXYMORON -"Now for the students schools bitter sweet"